[Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-sahib-451-new-protocol-elements-02

Matthew Miller <linuxwolf+ietf@outer-planes.net> Tue, 31 July 2018 21:03 UTC

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Subject: [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-sahib-451-new-protocol-elements-02

Reviewer: Matthew Miller
Review result: Ready with Issues

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Document: draft-sahib-451-new-protocol-elements-02
Reviewer: Matthew A. Miller
Review Date: 2018-07-31
IETF LC End Date: 2018-07-30
IESG Telechat date: N/A

Summary:

This document is ready to publish as an Informational draft, but
has an issue or two that ought to be addressed before publication.

Major issues: N/A

Minor issues:

Section 2.2. "Geographical Scope of Block" never states that the
new provisional header field name is "geo-scope-block".
Additionally, an example would be helpful to implementers.

Nits/editorial comments:

* In Section 2.1. "Blocking Authority", it leads with discussion
of a "blocked-by" header; however this is a registered relation type
for a "Link" header value.

* In Section 2.2. "Geographical Scope of Block", there is a missing
preposition "a" between "to" and "comma-separated" in the fragment
"This scope should correspond to comma-separated list ...".

* There are a number of nits that still need to be addressed:

  - RFC5988 (Web Linking) was obsoleted by RFC8288.
  - There are a number of unused references included: RFC2277,
    RFC3986, and RFC8280.

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