[Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-rtcweb-overview-18

Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com> Fri, 17 March 2017 00:43 UTC

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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair.  Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments.
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Document: draft-ietf-rtcweb-overview-18
Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
Review Date: 2017-03-16
IETF LC End Date:   2017-03-20
IESG Telechat date: 2017-04-13


Summary:
This draft is ready to be published as Standards Track RFC but I have comments.

Major issues:
Minor issues:
Nits/editorial comments:
-[Page 3] "an other hardware has"---->"and other hardware have"
-[Page 4], the word "subprotocol" was not clear to me. Would it be possible to add in parenthesis a few example for protocol and subprotocol?
-[Page 4], "an WebRTC"--->""a WebRTC"
-[Page 7], "Interactive Connectivty"--->"Interactive Connectivity"
-General: please spell out acronyms at first use
-General: the writing (or perhaps lack of punctuation) in this draft made it hard to read. Please consider reviewing it especially if the draft is intended as Standards Track.



Best Regards,
Meral
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Meral Shirazipour
Ericsson Research
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