[Gen-art] Gen-ART Review: draft-ietf-krb-wg-kerberos-referrals-14
Mary Barnes <mary.ietf.barnes@gmail.com> Mon, 24 September 2012 15:30 UTC
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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at < http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Document: draft-ietf-krb-wg-kerberos-referrals-14 Reviewer: Mary Barnes Review Date: 23 Sept 2012 IETF LC End Date: 26 Sept 2012 IETF Telechat Date: 27 Sept. 2012 Summary: Ready with question/nits. Minor Issue: ------------ Section 11, next to last paragraph, last sentence: "The value for this padata item should be empty." Is this really a "should" or is a MUST more appropriate? If it's a "should" then the cases whereby the item is not empty appropriate should be defined. Nits: ---- Section 6: - 2nd paragraph, 2nd sentence: "maintain ta set of aliases" -> "maintain a set of aliases". - 4th paragraph. I would suggest to remove the parenthesis - no reason for that statement not to be part of the main body of the previous paragraph. Section 11: - Paragraph after the schema: "The The" -> "The" Section 13.1: - 1st paragraph: "previously send by the KDC" -> "previously sent by the KDC"
- [Gen-art] Gen-ART Review: draft-ietf-krb-wg-kerbe… Mary Barnes
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Review: draft-ietf-krb-wg-k… Sam Hartman