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Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-payload-tsvcis-01.txt

Alissa Cooper <alissa@cooperw.in> Wed, 02 October 2019 21:05 UTC

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From: Alissa Cooper <alissa@cooperw.in>
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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-payload-tsvcis-01.txt
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Francis, thanks for your review. Authors, thanks for addressing Francis’ comments. I entered a No Objection ballot.

Alissa


> On Sep 26, 2019, at 3:26 PM, Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr> wrote:
> 
> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area
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> Document: draft-ietf-payload-tsvcis-01.txt
> Reviewer: Francis Dupont
> Review Date: 20190918
> IETF LC End Date: 20190925
> IESG Telechat date: unknown
> 
> Summary: Ready
> 
> Major issues: None
> 
> Minor issues: None
> 
> Nits/editorial comments:
> - 1.1 page 3: add RFC 8174 with RFC 2119
> 
> - 3 page 4 figure 1 and many other: if you have some control on page
>  formatting please try to put short figure on one page, and to not leave
>  for instance a section title alone at the end of a page. Note that
>  anyway the RFC Editor should fix that...
> 
> - 3.1 page 5: possible TCVCIS -> TSVCIS?
> 
> - 5 page 16: spurious space / bad indent at
>  " No SDP negotiations are required."
> 
> - 6 page 16: errored -> ?
> 
> - 9 page 17: the RFC Editor Considerations just says that the RFC Editor
>  may remove it? Looks like a place-holder...
> 
> Regards
> 
> Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr
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