Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-stox-im-12.txt
Peter Saint-Andre - &yet <peter@andyet.net> Wed, 04 March 2015 17:22 UTC
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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-stox-im-12.txt
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On 3/4/15 8:56 AM, Francis Dupont wrote: > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on > Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at > < http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Please wait for direction from your document shepherd > or AD before posting a new version of the draft. > > Document: draft-ietf-stox-im-12.txt > Reviewer: Francis Dupont > Review Date: 20150226 > IETF LC End Date: 20150302 > IESG Telechat date: 20150305 > > Summary: Ready > > Major issues: None > > Minor issues: None > > Nits/editorial comments: > - ToC page 2 and Appendix A page 11: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments > > - 1 page 2: even its meaning is obvious the abbrev IM is never > introduced. > > - 1 page 3: the word groupchat does not belong formerly to the > English language... > > - 4 page 5 (twice): acknowledgements -> acknowledgments > > - 8 page 8: signalling -> signaling > > - 11.2 page 10: the first informative reference is for a 2012 I-D. > > Regards > > Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr Thanks for the review, we'll address these points before publication. Peter
- [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-stox-im-12.txt Francis Dupont
- Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-stox-im-12.txt Peter Saint-Andre - &yet
- Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-stox-im-12.txt Brian E Carpenter
- Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-stox-im-12.txt Jari Arkko