[Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-boydseda-ipfix-psamp-bulk-data-yang-model-02

[Paul Kyzivat <[e-mail]>]

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Document: draft-boydseda-ipfix-psamp-bulk-data-yang-model-02
Reviewer: Paul Kyzivat
Review Date: 2019-12-16
IETF LC End Date: 2019-12-23
IESG Telechat date: (if known)

Summary:

This draft is on the right track but has open issues, described in the 
review.

Disclaimer:

I didn't review the actual YANG content in any meaningful way as I'm not 
fluent in it and assume the Yang Doctor will do that.

Issues:

Major: 0
Minor: 5
Nits:  1

1) MINOR:

This document will obsolete RFC6728 but it isn't evident to me whether 
it is backward compatible with the predecessor. Is there a plan for 
migration, or coexistence? It seems like this needs some discussion.

2) MINOR:

Section 1.1 says it contains a historical timeline. But the events in 
this timeline are not in chronological order. It would be easier to 
understand if you actually enumerated the events in chronological order.

3) MINOR:

Section 3 says that the document describes reference models based on 
RFC6728. But this document obsoletes RFC6728. This seems to set up a 
situation where there is a dependency on an obsoleted document. I 
presume this is not the intent.

I'm guessing that the models in this document have been derived from 
those in RFC6728, presumably in a way that is backward compatible in 
some sense. Can the relationship be described more precisely?

4) MINOR:

In sections 4.4.4 and 4.5.4 the file is identified by a URI. Are there 
limitations on the sort of URI this may be?

It seems to me this should be constrained in some way.

5) MINOR:

Some of the IP addresses and DNS names used in examples are not suitable 
for use in documentation:

In Appendix A:

- The IP address 192.100.2.1 used is not one of those reserved for 
documentation.

- The DNS names "proxy1.sys.com", "collect1.sys.com", "coll-1.ex.net", 
"coll-2.ex.net" are not among those reserved for documentation.

6) NIT:

In section 5 there are two uses of the word "proportions" where I think 
you mean "portions":

    ... As Exporters and Collectors implement different functions, the
    corresponding proportions of the model are conditional on the
    following features:

and:

    ... Therefore,
    the corresponding proportions of the model are conditional on the
    following feature:

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