Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART telechat review of draft-ietf-alto-deployments-15

"Mirja Kuehlewind (IETF)" <ietf@kuehlewind.net> Wed, 29 June 2016 22:26 UTC

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Sorry it’s late here…

> Am 30.06.2016 um 00:23 schrieb Mirja Kuehlewind (IETF) <ietf@kuehlewind.net>et>:
> 
> Hi Brian, hi Jari,
> 
> I’ve put updating Martin’s affliction incl. email address as well as removing the conclusion already in the RFC editor (in case we don’t do another update before publication).
> 
> I note your concerns about the references to individual drafst, however, not sure how this fix this.

s/darfst/drafts/ and s/how this fix this/how to fix this/

> 
> Thanks!
> Mirja
> 
> 
>> Am 30.06.2016 um 00:19 schrieb Jari Arkko <jari.arkko@piuha.net>et>:
>> 
>> Thanks much, Brian!
>> 
>> Authors, do note Brian’s comments.
>> 
>> Jari
>> 
>> On 24 Jun 2016, at 05:48, Brian E Carpenter <brian.e.carpenter@gmail.com> wrote:
>> 
>>> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area
>>> Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed
>>> by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please wait for direction from your
>>> document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft.
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>>> For more information, please see the FAQ at
>>> <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>.
>>> 
>>> Document: draft-ietf-alto-deployments-15.txt
>>> Reviewer: Brian Carpenter
>>> Review Date: 2016-06-13
>>> IETF LC End Date: 2016-06-21
>>> IESG Telechat date: 2016-06-30
>>> 
>>> Summary: Ready
>>> --------
>>> 
>>> Comment:
>>> --------
>>> 
>>> This is a long document but well written, so there is little to say about it.
>>> 
>>> Minor issues:
>>> -------------
>>> 
>>> The Conclusion section could be deleted. It doesn't add anything.
>>> 
>>> There are a lot of Informational references that are still personal I-Ds. Many of
>>> them are not even listed as "Related Internet-Drafts" for the Alto WG. I think readers
>>> of the future RFC will find this a bit annoying.
>>> 
>>> Nits:
>>> -----
>>> 
>>> <jan.seedorf@neclab.eu> and <martin.stiemerling@neclab.eu> bounced
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