[Gen-art] Gen-ART Telechat Call review of draft-ietf-trill-clear-correct-04

Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com> Tue, 03 July 2012 16:18 UTC

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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at < http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>gt;.

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Document: draft-ietf-trill-clear-correct-04
Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
Review Date: 2012-07-03
IETF LC End Date: 2012-06-20 
IESG Telechat date: 2012-07-05

Summary: This draft is ready for publication as a Proposed Standard but I have some last editorial comments.

Major issues:
-none

Minor issues:
-none

Nits/editorial comments:
-Consistency with RFC6325, [Page 18], below the table, "end station service disable bit" --missing dash--> "end-station service disable bit"

-Consistency: Acronyms are usually spelled out, then followed by the acronym in parenthesis [when first used]. On few occasions this has been reversed, ex. check for:
"EISS (Enhanced Internal Sublayer Service)", "DRB (Designated RBridge)" vs "Reverse Path Forwarding Check (RPFC)"

-Informative References, Ref. [802], please if you get a chance verify again the date of this document :)
I checked again on the version freely available at http://standards.ieee.org/about/get/802/802.html, it says "7 February, 2002". I could not find anything dated "8 March, 2002".




Thanks,
Meral

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Meral Shirazipour
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