[Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-pcn-signaling-requirements-07.txt
Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr> Sat, 14 January 2012 09:13 UTC
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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on
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Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
you may receive.
Document: draft-ietf-pcn-signaling-requirements-07.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 20120106
IETF LC End Date: 20120113
IESG Telechat date: unknown
Summary: Ready
Major issues: None
Minor issues: None
Nits/editorial comments:
- in the whole document: behaviour -> behavior and signalling -> signaling
(note the spelling of collocated is dubious too)
- Abstract page 1: in the latter case -> in the first case
- Abstract page 1: the usage is to not refer to RFC in the Abstract
- ToC page 2: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments
- 2 page 3: measures- -> measures (in general the document is at
the limit of abuse of '-' character, here it is clearly a typo)
- 6 page 6: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments
- 6 page 6: I don't like the term 'generated', IMHO you can easily
find a better/nicer term.
- 7.2 page 7: C. Le Faucher, -> C., Le Faucheur,
^ ^
Regards
Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr
- [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-pcn-signaling-requ… Francis Dupont
- Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-pcn-signaling-… karagian
- Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-pcn-signaling-… David Harrington
- Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-pcn-signaling-… karagian