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From: Daniel Migault <daniel.migault@ericsson.com>
To: Roni Even <ron.even.tlv@gmail.com>, "gen-art@ietf.org" <gen-art@ietf.org>
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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-lwig-minimal-esp-04
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Hi Roni, 

Thanks for the review. We can of course add that RFC4303 is authoritative in the main body. I will update the document.

I am wondering what differences you have in mind. Of course the document are different but I am wondering if there is anything we should clarify. 

Yours, 
Daniel


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Subject: Genart last call review of draft-ietf-lwig-minimal-esp-04

Reviewer: Roni Even
Review result: Ready with Issues

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Document: draft-ietf-lwig-minimal-esp-??
Reviewer: Roni Even
Review Date: 2021-04-02
IETF LC End Date: None
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary:
This is an early review of the draft. I find the 04 version easy to understand but have one comment

Major issues:

Minor issues:
the last paragraph in the abstract , mostly the last sentence " RFC 4303 remains the authoritative description." should be in my opinion in the main body of the document and not only in the abstract. I also see some difference between the document and RFC4303

Nits/editorial comments:

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