[Gen-art] Telechat review of draft-ietf-tsvwg-rfc5405bis-18

Paul Kyzivat <pkyzivat@alum.mit.edu> Tue, 11 October 2016 19:21 UTC

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Document: draft-ietf-tsvwg-rfc5405bis-18
Reviewer: Paul Kyzivat
Review Date: 2016-10-07
IETF LC End Date: 2016-05-31
IESG Telechat date: 2016-10-13


This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits that should 
be fixed before publication.

Major: 0
Minor: 0
Nits:  2


(1) NIT: "RTT" is used without definition. (There used to be a 
definition but it has been removed.)

(2) NIT: unlinked references

I found a number of cases where, in the html format, references are not 

[RFC4342] section 3
[RFC6679] section 3.1.7
[RFC1981] section 3.2
[RFC6935] section 3.4.1