Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-siprec-callflows-07

"Ram Mohan R (rmohanr)" <rmohanr@cisco.com> Thu, 01 December 2016 13:53 UTC

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From: "Ram Mohan R (rmohanr)" <rmohanr@cisco.com>
To: Dan Romascanu <dromasca@gmail.com>, "gen-art@ietf.org" <gen-art@ietf.org>, "draft-ietf-siprec-callflows.all@tools.ietf.org" <draft-ietf-siprec-callflows.all@tools.ietf.org>
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Hi Dan,

Thanks for your review. Please see inline

From: Dan Romascanu <dromasca@gmail.com>
Date: Friday, 25 November 2016 at 5:46 PM
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Subject: Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-siprec-callflows-07
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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area
Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed
by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please wait for direction from your
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Document:

draft-ietf-siprec-callflows-07

Reviewer: Dan Romascanu
Review Date: 11/25/16
IETF LC End Date: 11/27/16
IESG Telechat date: (if known) 12/2/16

Summary: Ready.

This is a very useful supporting document in the SIPREC cluster.

Major issues:

None

Minor issues:

None


Nits/editorial comments:

1. The title is slightly misleading, as the document does not have as goal to document all or the most important call flows, but rather to provide a grouping of significant examples. 'Examples of SUP Recording Call Flows' may have been a better title.

<Ram> I agree. The document contains only most important call flows. So I will rename to “Examples of SIP Recording Call Flows”

2. As the document uses terminology defined in [RFC7865] and [RFC6341], listing these two RFCs as Normative References seems necessary (can't understand the terms without reading the two RFCs)

<Ram> agree. Will do that.

3. typo in the Securoty Considerations section: '

Security considerations mentioned in [RFC7865] and [RFC7866] has to be followed ...

s/has to/have to/

<Ram> Thanks will fix it.

Regards
Ram