Re: [Gen-art] Review of draft-ietf-nvo3-use-case-15

Jari Arkko <jari.arkko@piuha.net> Thu, 19 January 2017 08:32 UTC

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Thanks for the review, Ralph, and for taking care of the edits, Lucy!

Jari

On 06 Jan 2017, at 17:46, Lucy yong <lucy.yong@huawei.com> wrote:

> Hi Ralph,
> 
> Thank you for the review. We will have all acronyms expansion in next version and add a reference for DC services.
> 
> Regards,
> Lucy
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> -----Original Message-----
> From: Gen-art [mailto:gen-art-bounces@ietf.org] On Behalf Of Ralph Droms
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> Subject: [Gen-art] Review of draft-ietf-nvo3-use-case-15
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> Reviewer: Ralph Droms
> Review result: Ready with Nits
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> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair.  Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments.
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> Document: draft-ietf-nvo3-use-case-??
> Reviewer: Ralph Droms
> Review Date: 2017-01-06
> IETF LC End Date: 2017-01-11
> IESG Telechat date: 2017-01-19
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> Summary: This draft is ready for publication as an Informational RFC.
> 
> Major issues: None
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> Minor issues: None
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> Nits/editorial comments:
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> I found several acronyms that did not have expansions.  I recommend a pass over the document for unexpanded acronyms..
> 
> Section 2: What is "broadcast/unknown" traffic (spec. "unknown"?); please expand the acronym "BUM".
>  The paragraph that begins with "One NVO3 network [...]" is indented differently from the rest of the text.  Intentional or a typo?
> 
> Section 3.2: An illustrating figure for the use case described in this section would be helpful.
>  Expand acronyms "PE" and "ABSR".
>  I found the text using "Option A" and "Option B" confusing.  Exactly what are those options?
> 
> Section 5: I didn't understand the references to IaaS, PaaS and SaaS in the summary - there are no references to those services in the body of the document, or back pointers from the summary to relevant preceding text.
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