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Re: [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-nfsv4-rfc5661sesqui-msns-03

Vijay Gurbani <vijay.gurbani@gmail.com> Thu, 02 January 2020 20:09 UTC

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From: Vijay Gurbani <vijay.gurbani@gmail.com>
Date: Thu, 02 Jan 2020 14:10:40 -0600
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To: David Noveck <davenoveck@gmail.com>
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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-nfsv4-rfc5661sesqui-msns-03
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Dear David: Thanks for addressing my comments.  Regarding not being able to
see long lines as I report below, please see the attached screenshot
corresponding to the "htmlized" version of the draft.
Cheers,
- vijay

On Thu, Jan 2, 2020 at 9:29 AM David Noveck <davenoveck@gmail.com> wrote:

>
>
> On Tue, Dec 17, 2019 at 7:17 PM Vijay Gurbani via Datatracker <
> noreply@ietf.org> wrote:
>
>> Reviewer: Vijay Gurbani
>> Review result: Ready with Nits
>>
>> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area
>> Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed
>> by the IESG for the IETF Chair.  Please treat these comments just
>> like any other last call comments.
>>
>> For more information, please see the FAQ at
>>
>> <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>.
>>
>> Document: draft-ietf-nfsv4-rfc5661sesqui-msns-??
>> Reviewer: Vijay K. Gurbani
>> Review Date: 2019-12-17
>> IETF LC End Date: 2019-11-25
>> IESG Telechat date: 2019-12-19
>>
>> I have reviewed about 1/2 of the I-D, up to Section 12 (page 297).  I will
>> review the remaining 1/2 before the telchat, but I suspect that given my
>> very
>> high level overview of the draft, my disposition will not change.
>>
>> Summary:  This draft is ready for publication as a Proposed Standard.  In
>> the
>> portion of the draft I reviewed, there are some minor nits that can
>> easily be
>> fixed.
>>
>> Major issues: 0
>>
>> Minor issues: 0
>>
>> Nits/editorial comments: 4 ("Sn" means Section n):
>> 1/ Appendix A: s/No correesponding explanation/No corresponding
>> explanation/
>>
>
> Fixed.
>
> 2/ S1: s/authoritative complete/authoritatively complete/
>>
>
> I went with "authoritative and complete"
>
> 3/ S1.7 (page 12): "associable" or "associated to"
>>
>
> Went with "can be associated with".
>
>
>> 4/ There are many long lines that go beyond 80 characters, see S1.9, the
>> bullet
>> that starts with “o  Open files can be …”,
>
>
> I don't see sny long lines here, either in the .txt or .xml.
>
>
>>  Table 1,
>
>
> Here the .txt is OK but the .xml has long line.   WIll clean up  to make
> future
> editing of the .xml easier.
>
>
>> S4.2.1, etc.
>>
>
> I don't see sny long lines here, either in the .txt or .xml.
>
>
>
>>
>> Thanks,
>>
>> - vijay
>>
>>
>>

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