[Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-signaling-g709v3-11

"Vijay K. Gurbani" <vkg@bell-labs.com> Mon, 26 August 2013 15:27 UTC

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Cc: Adrian Farrel <adrian@olddog.co.uk>, General Area Review Team <gen-art@ietf.org>, Lou Berger <lberger@labn.net>, dbrungard@att.com
Subject: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-signaling-g709v3-11
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Document: draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-signaling-g709v3-11
Reviewer: Vijay K. Gurbani
Review Date: Aug-26-2013
IETF LC End Date: Unknown
IESG Telechat date: Unknown

This document is ready as an Proposed Standard.

Major: 0
Minor: 0
Nits: 1


- S1, first paragraph: Expand "OTN" on first use.  Also,
  s/provided for [G709-2012]./provided for OTNs [G709-2012]./

  The last substitution above is a general comment since this construct
  appears multiple times in S1 and the rest of the document.

  Essentially, you need a label before the reference itself.  Making the
  reference itself a label seems incongruent (at least to me).  I am
  filing this as a nit, so I will let you decide whether to change it or


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