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Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com> Tue, 03 September 2019 05:56 UTC

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From: Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com>
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Subject: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-tls-sni-encryption-05
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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair.  Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments.

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Document: draft-ietf-tls-sni-encryption-05
Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
Review Date: 2019-09-02
IETF LC End Date: 2019-09-02
IESG Telechat date: NA


Summary: This draft is ready to be published as an Informational RFC.
Major issues:

Minor issues:

Nits/editorial comments:
Some may have already been reported…

-[Page 2], Section 1, "colocated"--->"collocated"

-[Page 3], Section 2, "mutiple"---->"multiple"

-[Page 3], Section 2.1, "fradulent"---->"fraudulent"

-[Page 4], Section 2.1, "MITM inspection", please spell out Man-In-The-Middle attack at first use

-[Page 7], Section 3.6, "is the the"---->"is the"

-[Page 10], Section 4.2, "ferver"---->"server"




Best Regards,
Meral
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