[Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-pals-status-reduction-04

Dan Romascanu <dromasca@gmail.com> Fri, 31 March 2017 15:39 UTC

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Reviewer: Dan Romascanu
Review result: Ready with Nits

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Document: draft-ietf-pals-status-reduction-??
Reviewer: Dan Romascanu
Review Date: 2017-03-31
IETF LC End Date: 2017-03-31
IESG Telechat date: 2017-04-13

Summary:

This document describes a very useful optimization for MPLS LSP PWs
operations by defining a method for generating an aggregated PW 
status message transmitted on a MPLS LSP to indicate the status of the
PWs carried on the LSP. The document is clear, detailed and provides
all needed information for implementers to write code and for
operators to deploy. 

Major issues:

Minor issues:

Nits/editorial comments: 

1. In section 8, first paragraph: s/rages/ranges/
2. In sections 8.3, 8.4 the construct "IETF Review" is worded in three
different ways (IETF review, IETF Review, "IETF Review") - better
align