[Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-spring-segment-routing-mpls-18.txt

Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr> Thu, 07 March 2019 15:39 UTC

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Document: draft-ietf-spring-segment-routing-mpls-18.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 20190228
IETF LC End Date: 20190307
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Ready

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments: 
 - ToC page 3 and 7 page 20: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments

 - 1 page 3: RFC8402 -> [RFC8402]

 - 2.1 page 5: ...,etc -> either ... or etc but not both

 - 2.2 page 5: i.e. -> i.e.,

 - 2.6 page 14: e.g. -> e.g.,

 - 9 page 24: Italy -> IT (for consistency)

 - A.2.1 page 28: if you have control on the text rendering: move FEC1: to
  the next page.

Spelling (other than Acknowledgements):
 - 2.10.1 page 17 and A.1 page 28: useable -> usable
 - A.1 page 28: penumtimate -> penultimate
 - A.2.1 page 29: ofthe -> of the
Please note all these editorial comments can be handled by the RFC Editor
so do not address them if you do not need to publish a new version of
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