[Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-tls-oldversions-deprecate-09

[Mohit Sethi via Datatracker <[e-mail]>]

Reviewer: Mohit Sethi
Review result: Ready

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Document: draft-ietf-tls-oldversions-deprecate-09
Reviewer: Mohit Sethi
Review Date: 2020-11-25
IETF LC End Date: 2020-11-30
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary: This document deprecates older versions of TLS and DTLS. It also
updates many RFCs that normatively refer to the older TLS/DTLS versions.

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments: In section 1.1, typo in "waas defined to detect".

Most references to RFCs are of the form "[RFC7507]". Can we change "RFC 7457
[RFC7457]" to "[RFC7457]" for uniformity. Similarly, perhaps you could change
"RFC5246 [RFC5246]" and "RFC4346 [RFC4346]" to "[RFC5246]" and "[RFC4346]".

In section 2 "NIST for example have provided " should be "..has provided...".

In section 6 "this document is called out specifically to update text
implementing the deprecation  recommendations of this document." I was
initially confused with the repeated usage of "this". Perhaps it would help to
be more explicit.