[Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-karp-threats-reqs-05

"Vijay K. Gurbani" <vkg@bell-labs.com> Wed, 18 July 2012 20:21 UTC

Return-Path: <vkg@bell-labs.com>
X-Original-To: gen-art@ietfa.amsl.com
Delivered-To: gen-art@ietfa.amsl.com
Received: from localhost (localhost []) by ietfa.amsl.com (Postfix) with ESMTP id C341E11E81A4 for <gen-art@ietfa.amsl.com>; Wed, 18 Jul 2012 13:21:18 -0700 (PDT)
X-Virus-Scanned: amavisd-new at amsl.com
X-Spam-Flag: NO
X-Spam-Score: -109.576
X-Spam-Status: No, score=-109.576 tagged_above=-999 required=5 tests=[AWL=0.796, BAYES_00=-2.599, RCVD_IN_DNSWL_HI=-8, SARE_SUB_OBFU_Q1=0.227, USER_IN_WHITELIST=-100]
Received: from mail.ietf.org ([]) by localhost (ietfa.amsl.com []) (amavisd-new, port 10024) with ESMTP id 8LpuC+aBDCEq for <gen-art@ietfa.amsl.com>; Wed, 18 Jul 2012 13:21:17 -0700 (PDT)
Received: from ihemail2.lucent.com (ihemail2.lucent.com []) by ietfa.amsl.com (Postfix) with ESMTP id 8515E11E81A0 for <gen-art@ietf.org>; Wed, 18 Jul 2012 13:21:17 -0700 (PDT)
Received: from usnavsmail3.ndc.alcatel-lucent.com (usnavsmail3.ndc.alcatel-lucent.com []) by ihemail2.lucent.com (8.13.8/IER-o) with ESMTP id q6IKM5xt013287 (version=TLSv1/SSLv3 cipher=DHE-RSA-AES256-SHA bits=256 verify=OK); Wed, 18 Jul 2012 15:22:06 -0500 (CDT)
Received: from umail.lucent.com (umail-ce2.ndc.lucent.com []) by usnavsmail3.ndc.alcatel-lucent.com (8.14.3/8.14.3/GMO) with ESMTP id q6IKM3JG003516 (version=TLSv1/SSLv3 cipher=DHE-RSA-AES256-SHA bits=256 verify=NOT); Wed, 18 Jul 2012 15:22:04 -0500
Received: from shoonya.ih.lucent.com (shoonya.ih.lucent.com []) by umail.lucent.com (8.13.8/TPES) with ESMTP id q6IKM3Ax016794; Wed, 18 Jul 2012 15:22:03 -0500 (CDT)
Message-ID: <50071C5A.7040106@bell-labs.com>
Date: Wed, 18 Jul 2012 15:28:10 -0500
From: "Vijay K. Gurbani" <vkg@bell-labs.com>
Organization: Bell Laboratories, Alcatel-Lucent
User-Agent: Mozilla/5.0 (X11; Linux i686; rv:13.0) Gecko/20120605 Thunderbird/13.0
MIME-Version: 1.0
To: draft-ietf-karp-threats-reqs@tools.ietf.org
Content-Type: text/plain; charset="ISO-8859-1"; format="flowed"
Content-Transfer-Encoding: 7bit
X-Scanned-By: MIMEDefang 2.57 on
X-Scanned-By: MIMEDefang 2.64 on
Cc: General Area Review Team <gen-art@ietf.org>, bew@cisco.com, Stewart Bryant <stbryant@cisco.com>
Subject: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-karp-threats-reqs-05
X-BeenThere: gen-art@ietf.org
X-Mailman-Version: 2.1.12
Precedence: list
List-Id: "GEN-ART: General Area Review Team" <gen-art.ietf.org>
List-Unsubscribe: <https://www.ietf.org/mailman/options/gen-art>, <mailto:gen-art-request@ietf.org?subject=unsubscribe>
List-Archive: <http://www.ietf.org/mail-archive/web/gen-art>
List-Post: <mailto:gen-art@ietf.org>
List-Help: <mailto:gen-art-request@ietf.org?subject=help>
List-Subscribe: <https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art>, <mailto:gen-art-request@ietf.org?subject=subscribe>
X-List-Received-Date: Wed, 18 Jul 2012 20:21:19 -0000

I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on
Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at

Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
you may receive.

Document: draft-ietf-karp-threats-reqs-05
Reviewer: Vijay K. Gurbani
Review Date: Jul-18-2012
IETF LC End Date: Unknown
IESG Telechat date: Jul-19-2012

Summary: This draft is ready as an Informational.

Major: 0
Minor: 0
Nits: 4

- S1, last paragraph has a spurious ":
  s/in their usage."/in their usage.
- S1.1, in the description of Traffic Key: the second sentence is
  a run on sentence and could do with an extra comma (,) as follows:
  s/device configuration no data/device configuration, no data/
- S2.2, first paragraph:
  s/yet-best- security-possible/yet-best-security-possible/
- S3.2, under "INFERENCE", there are six sub-bullets.  The labels
  on all of them except the last one are capitalized.  Any reason
  for the discrepancy?


- vijay
Vijay K. Gurbani, Bell Laboratories, Alcatel-Lucent
1960 Lucent Lane, Rm. 9C-533, Naperville, Illinois 60563 (USA)
Email: vkg@{bell-labs.com,acm.org} / vijay.gurbani@alcatel-lucent.com
Web:   http://ect.bell-labs.com/who/vkg/