Re: [Gen-art] Genart telechat review of draft-ietf-pce-wson-rwa-ext-11

Alissa Cooper <alissa@cooperw.in> Tue, 05 February 2019 19:23 UTC

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Elwyn, thanks for your reviews. Young, thank you for your responses. I entered a No Objection ballot.

Alissa

> On Jan 29, 2019, at 8:02 PM, Leeyoung <leeyoung@huawei.com>; wrote:
> 
> Hi Elwyn,
> 
> Thanks for further review and confirming the acceptance of the most of the edits while pointing out a few items to be corrected. I will update those during the IESG review. 
> 
> Best regards,
> Young
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> -----Original Message-----
> From: Elwyn Davies [mailto:elwynd@dial.pipex.com] 
> Sent: Monday, January 28, 2019 2:13 PM
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> Subject: Genart telechat review of draft-ietf-pce-wson-rwa-ext-11
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> Reviewer: Elwyn Davies
> Review result: Ready
> 
> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft.
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> Document: draft-ietf-pce-wson-rwa-ext-117
> Reviewer: Elwyn Davies
> Review Date: 2019-01-28
> IETF LC End Date: 2018-12-27
> IESG Telechat date: 2019-02-07
> 
> Summary:
> Ready.  There are a couple of trivial nits remaining. Otherwise, thanks very much for addressing my last call comments.
> 
> Major issues:
> None.
> 
> Minor issues:
> None.
> 
> Nits/editorial comments:
> S3: The expansion of 3R needs to be at first occurrence. This is one paragraph earlier than the added expansion in v11.
> 
> S3, next to last para: need to expand FEC.
> 
> S4.1, para 5: s/to the allocation/used for the allocation/
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