[Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-lamps-cms-mix-with-psk-05
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Reviewer: Robert Sparks Review result: Ready with Issues I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments. For more information, please see the FAQ at <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Document: draft-ietf-lamps-cms-mix-with-psk-05 Reviewer: Robert Sparks Review Date: 2019-07-30 IETF LC End Date: 2019-08-06 IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat Summary: Essentially ready for publication as a Proposed Standard, but with an issue to address before publication. Issue: The instructions for IANA are unclear. IANA has to infer what to add to the registries. I think they _can_ infer what to do for the IANA-MOD registry. It's harder (though still possible) to guess what to do for IANA-SMIME. They also have to infer the structure of the new registry this document intends to create. Explicit would be better. Also, the document anticipates the currently non-existing anchor to the new registry in the references (security-smime-13). That generally should also be a tbd to be filled by IANA when the anchor is actually created. Nits/editorial comments: Section 5, 1st paragraph, last sentence: "make use fo" should be "makes use of" Section 9, 1st sentence : "in the Section 5" should be "in Section 6". (That's two changes - the removal of a word, and a correction to the section number). Micronit: In the introduction, you say "can be invulnerable to an attacker". "invulnerable" is maybe stronger than you mean?
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