[Gen-art] review of draft-freytag-lager-variant-rules-05.txt
Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr> Wed, 17 May 2017 12:53 UTC
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Subject: [Gen-art] review of draft-freytag-lager-variant-rules-05.txt
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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments. For more information, please see the FAQ at <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Document: draft-freytag-lager-variant-rules-05.txt Reviewer: Francis Dupont Review Date: 20170516 IETF LC End Date: 20170515 IESG Telechat date: unknown Summary: Ready with Nits Major issues: None Minor issues: None Nits/editorial comments: - 1 page 2: as the document cannot be understood without reading the RFC 7940 the reference to RFC 79040 must be moved as early as possible (I suggest just after the LGRs introduction and the warning "However, the reader is expected to have some familiarity..." emphased and moved to earlier in the section. (I already raised thos concern at my first review, it wasn't fixed but for this second review I had the 82 pages of RFC 7940 with me :-) Regards Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr PS: I don't think it will work for the languages I used but it is an information document based on some experiments so what matters is it can help even it is not for general cases...
- [Gen-art] review of draft-freytag-lager-variant-r… Francis Dupont
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