[Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-ecrit-lost-sync-17
Wassim Haddad <wassim.haddad@ericsson.com> Wed, 25 April 2012 05:11 UTC
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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq. Please resolve these comments along with any other comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-ecrit-lost-sync-17 Reviewer: Wassim Haddad Review Date: 2012-04-24 IETF LC End Date: 2012-04-18 IESG Telechat date: 2012-04-26 Summary: This draft is ready for publication as experimental standard but some clarifications/re-writings would be helpful. Major issues: None Minor issues: - Perhaps I missed it somewhere in the document, but I could not find the meaning of "ESRPs" (page 5) - Suggest re-writing the last paragraph on page 8 - Suggest re-writing the 3-line paragraph on page 9 Regards, Wassim H.
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