[Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-detnet-ip-05

Roni Even via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org> Mon, 09 March 2020 14:43 UTC

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Reviewer: Roni Even
Review result: Ready with Nits

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Document: draft-ietf-detnet-ip-??
Reviewer: Roni Even
Review Date: 2020-03-09
IETF LC End Date: 2020-03-13
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary: The document is ready for publication as a standard track RFC with nits

Major issues:

Minor issues:

Nits/editorial comments:

1. In section 3 the paragraph before the last one " the appropriate DetNet
flow-specific information and ensures that the receives the proper traffic
treatment within the domain", looks to me that it should be "that the flow
receives ..."

2.  In section 6  I could not parse the second level bullet "When the DSCP
field is used in flow identification, a list of field values that may be used
by a specific flow."