[Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-avtcore-feedback-supression-rtp-16.txt
Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr> Wed, 11 April 2012 15:42 UTC
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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at < http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft. Document: draft-ietf-avtcore-feedback-supression-16.txt Reviewer: Francis Dupont Review Date: 20120323 IETF LC End Date: 20120326 IESG Telechat date: 20120412 Summary: Ready Major issues: None Minor issues: None Nits/editorial comments: These are about the -15 version updated to -16 - I-D name: supression -> suppression - Abstract page 1: implosion -> explosion (things which can implode are rare :-) - Abstract page 1: signalling -> signaling - Toc page 2 and 9 page 12: Acknowledgement -> Acknowledgment - Introduction page 4: RTCP is not a well known abbrev: as it is first you have to introduce it. - Introduction page 4: same for SSM: please introduce the abbrev - Introduction page 4: implosion -> explosion - Introduction page 4 and other places: e.g. -> e.g., - 3 page 6: ,which -> , which - 4 page 6: missing characters/words in "the PT, FMT,length SSRC" - 4.1 page 7: all caps in "transport layer third-party loss" - 4.2 page 7: if the SSRC is an IPv4 address the "set to 0" is not very correct. - 4.2 page 7: media Source -> media source - 4.2 page 8: :32 -> : 32 - 6.1 page 9: source- specific -> source-specific - 6.1 page 9: reason( -> reason ( & a RTCP -> an RTCP & NACK)and -> NACK) and - 6.2 page 10: Sources(BRS) -> Sources (BRS) - 6.2 page 10: a RTCP -> an RTCP - 6.4 page 10: receivers. e.g., -> receivers: e.g., - 6.4 page 10: a RTCP -> an RTCP - 6.5 page 11: a RTCP -> an RTCP (with a line break in the middle :-) - 7 page 11: supression -> suppression - 9 page 12: Acknowledgement -> Acknowledgment, VAN CAENEGEM -> van Caenegem, Johansson S -> Johansson - 10.2 page 14: please give the names of I-Ds - Appendix A page 14: usually the change log is in the reverse order (?) - A.8 page 16: ,Security -> , Security - A.14 page 17: refereces -> references Regards Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr
- [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-avtcore-feedback-s… Francis Dupont
- Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-avtcore-feedba… Qin Wu
- Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-avtcore-feedba… Francis Dupont
- Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-avtcore-feedba… Qin Wu
- Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-avtcore-feedba… Magnus Westerlund
- Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-avtcore-feedba… Qin Wu
- Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-avtcore-feedba… Francis Dupont
- Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-avtcore-feedba… Francis Dupont
- Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-avtcore-feedba… Qin Wu