[Gen-art] IETC LC Review of draft-ietf-lmap-framework-11

Tom Taylor <tom.taylor.stds@gmail.com> Mon, 09 March 2015 13:15 UTC

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Document:  draft-ietf-lmap-framework-11
Reviewer:  Tom Taylor
Review Date: 2015/03/05
IETF LC End Date: 2015/03/09
IESG Telechat date: 2015/03/12

Summary: Beautifully written and very complete. A few editorial nits 
that could be safely ignored without affecting the utility of the document.

Major issues:

Minor issues:

Nits/editorial comments:

Section 3, "Logging Information": s/and which/which/

Section 5, bullet 1.: not sure a protocol is trying to achieve a 
problem. Achieve a solution to a problem (solve or resolve it) or 
achieve an objective, perhaps.

Section 7, second paragraph: should delete the reference to the charter, 
since that is ephemeral information. I would rephrase as follows:
  s/similar to the protocol/just as is the protocol/