Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-spring-segment-routing-mpls-18.txt

Ahmed Bashandy <abashandy.ietf@gmail.com> Thu, 07 March 2019 19:48 UTC

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To: Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr>, gen-art@ietf.org
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From: Ahmed Bashandy <abashandy.ietf@gmail.com>
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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-spring-segment-routing-mpls-18.txt
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Thanks a lot for the comments

I do not need to publish a new version

So I would take your advice of leaving the editorial comments to the RFC 
editor

Thanks

Ahmed


On 3/7/19 6:57 AM, Francis Dupont wrote:
> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area
> Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed
> by the IESG for the IETF Chair.  Please treat these comments just
> like any other last call comments.
>
> For more information, please see the FAQ at
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> <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>.
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> Document: draft-ietf-spring-segment-routing-mpls-18.txt
> Reviewer: Francis Dupont
> Review Date: 20190228
> IETF LC End Date: 20190307
> IESG Telechat date: unknown
>
> Summary: Ready
>
> Major issues: None
>
> Minor issues: None
>
> Nits/editorial comments:
>   - ToC page 3 and 7 page 20: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments
>
>   - 1 page 3: RFC8402 -> [RFC8402]
>
>   - 2.1 page 5: ...,etc -> either ... or etc but not both
>
>   - 2.2 page 5: i.e. -> i.e.,
>
>   - 2.6 page 14: e.g. -> e.g.,
>
>   - 9 page 24: Italy -> IT (for consistency)
>
>   - A.2.1 page 28: if you have control on the text rendering: move FEC1: to
>    the next page.
>
> Spelling (other than Acknowledgements):
>   - 2.10.1 page 17 and A.1 page 28: useable -> usable
>   - A.1 page 28: penumtimate -> penultimate
>   - A.2.1 page 29: ofthe -> of the
>   
> Please note all these editorial comments can be handled by the RFC Editor
> so do not address them if you do not need to publish a new version of
> the document.
>
> Regards
>
> Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr