[Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-bess-evpn-virtual-eth-segment-08

Meral Shirazipour via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org> Mon, 24 April 2023 23:34 UTC

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Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
Review result: Ready with Nits

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Document: draft-ietf-bess-evpn-virtual-eth-segment-08
Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
Review Date: 2023-04-24
IETF LC End Date: 2023-04-27
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary: This draft is almost ready to be published as Standard RFC, no other
comments than those on the list.

Major issues:

Minor issues:

Nits/editorial comments:
-Section 1 , "This document extends the Ethernet Segment concept so that an ES
can
   be associated to a set of EVCs (e.g., VLANs) or other objects such as
   MPLS Label Switch Paths (LSPs) or Pseudowires (PWs), referred to as
   Virtual Ethernet Segments (vES)." & Section 1.1

It would be great to add a sentence on why we need this and what is the current
alternative.

-[Page 20], Section 5.4, "large numbe of "--->"large number of "