[Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-alto-deployments-15

Brian E Carpenter <brian.e.carpenter@gmail.com> Mon, 13 June 2016 05:19 UTC

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Subject: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-alto-deployments-15
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Document: draft-ietf-alto-deployments-15.txt
Reviewer: Brian Carpenter
Review Date: 2016-06-13
IETF LC End Date: 2016-06-21
IESG Telechat date: 2016-06-30

Summary: Ready
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Comment:
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This is a long document but well written, so there is little to say about it.

Minor issues:
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The Conclusion section could be deleted. It doesn't add anything.

There are a lot of Informational references that are still personal I-Ds. Many of
them are not even listed as "Related Internet-Drafts" for the Alto WG. I think readers
of the future RFC will find this a bit annoying.