[Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-v6ops-nd-cache-init-04

[Stewart Bryant via Datatracker <[e-mail]>]

Reviewer: Stewart Bryant
Review result: Ready with Nits

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Document: draft-ietf-v6ops-nd-cache-init-10
Reviewer: Stewart Bryant
Review Date: 2020-09-03
IETF LC End Date: 2020-09-04
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary: The purpose of the GENART review is to provide a fresh pair of eyes
not familiar with the work. I am sure that those that deal with the detail of
IPv6 day to day will completely understand this on the first pass, but for
those not familiar some attention to the abbreviations is needed. Also the
Abstract and Intro do not seem to this first time reader to align with the
purpose of the text.

Major issues:
As far as I can see there is a preferred solution documented in
I-D.ietf-6man-grand, and this text documents the problem and the rejected
alternatives, but that does not come through in reading the abstract or
introduction.

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments:

SB> There is a problem I that the introduction uses a number of terms which are
not well known to the wider IETF community, and which are not defined until
later in the text : SLAAC, GUA, DAD. SB> The term LLA is not defined here or by
the RFC editor. SB> SLLAO? Needs expanding
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   o  Some wireless devices are known to fiddle with
SB> an unusual technical term
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   o  Data packets to the router LLA
SB> LLA? Not in the editors list and not defined as far as I can see,