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Re: [Gen-art] Review: draft-ietf-pim-join-attributes-for-lisp-05

Lucy yong <lucy.yong@huawei.com> Thu, 01 December 2016 20:00 UTC

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From: Lucy yong <lucy.yong@huawei.com>
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OK, forget my suggestion. I have a difficulty to parse this sentence (second part)

  It determines the downstream destination for unicast head-end replication and identifies the
  receiver ETR that needs to be notified should the root of the
  distribution tree move to another site.

Lucy

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From: Dino Farinacci [mailto:farinacci@gmail.com] 
Sent: Thursday, December 01, 2016 1:45 PM
To: Lucy yong
Cc: Jari Arkko; draft-ietf-pim-join-attributes-for-lisp@tools.ietf.org; General Area Review Team; Stig Venaas
Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Review: draft-ietf-pim-join-attributes-for-lisp-05


> Could you make this sentence more readable?
> 
>   It determines the downstream destination for unicast head-end replication and identifies the
>   receiver ETR that needs to be notified should the root of the
>   distribution tree move to another site.
> 
> "should be", "moving”?

I do not understand what you are suggesting. Write more words please.

Dino

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