Re: [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-dnsop-dns-zone-digest-09

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From: "Wessels, Duane" <dwessels@verisign.com>
To: Elwyn Davies <elwynd@dial.pipex.com>
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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-dnsop-dns-zone-digest-09
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Hi Elwyn,

Thanks for the review!

> On Sep 12, 2020, at 3:09 PM, Elwyn Davies via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org> wrote:
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> Reviewer: Elwyn Davies
> Review result: Ready with Nits
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> Document: draft-ietf-dnsop-dns-zone-digest-09
> Reviewer: Elwyn Davies
> Review Date: 2020-09-12
> IETF LC End Date: 2020-09-14
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> Summary: Ready with  few nits.
> 
> Major issues:
> None

(Your original email was truncated around here but I "repaired" it with what I found at https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/review-ietf-dnsop-dns-zone-digest-09-genart-lc-davies-2020-09-12/)

> 
> Minor Issues:
> s2.3:  The example of the presenation format shown in s2.4 has the sequence of hex digits representing the Digest surrounded in parentheses.  This is not specified in s2.3.  Which is right?

The use of parentheses for continuation of long lines is a long-standing feature of DNS record presentation described in RFC 1035 (sec 5.1).

> 
> Nits and Editorial:
> 
> s1, para 2: s/verification the zone as a whole/verification of the zone as a whole/

Fixed.

> 
> s1.1, last para: s/aka AXFR SIG/identified as the AXFR SIG/

Fixed.

> 
> s3.1, para 4:  I think this should be RECOMMENDED.

Yes, this was also identified in the SECDIR review and I've made the change.

> 
> s9:  I have a suspiscion that you mean David Black rather than David Blacka.

David Blacka is a colleague of mine at Verisign and coauthor of several RFCs:

https://www.rfc-editor.org/search/rfc_search_detail.php?pubstatus%5B%5D=Any&pub_date_type=any&author=Blacka

DW