[Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-lpwan-schc-over-lorawan-10

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Reviewer: Robert Sparks
Review result: Ready with Nits

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Document: draft-ietf-lpwan-schc-over-lorawan-10
Reviewer: Robert Sparks
Review Date: 2020-10-02
IETF LC End Date: 2020-10-02
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary: Ready for publication as a proposed standard but with nits to consider
before publication

Nits/editorial comments:

The abstract says "This is called a profile." It would be better to say
something like "This document specifies a profile of RFC8724."

What does "other Internet networks" mean? Please replace the phrase with
something more descriptive.

The word "efficient" in the last sentence of the introduction is puzzling.
Could it simply be removed?

As the shepherd report notes, there are figures that need to be reworked to
satisfy column constraints.