Re: [Gen-art] Review of draft-elie-nntp-tls-recommendations-01

Julien ÉLIE <julien@trigofacile.com> Wed, 07 December 2016 21:19 UTC

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Hi Jouni,

First of all, thanks for having taken time to review the document.


> I think this document is ready for publication.
>
> I have comment, which is just a suggestion concerning document
> structure. Currently the updates/changes to RFC4642 are listed in
> Introduction. On the other hand there is a specific section for
> recommendations. I would move the updates/changes to RFC4642 into its
> own section just to make the document a bit more structured.

Is it OK if I move from Section 1 "Introduction", the part "Notably, 
this document updates [RFC4642]... of [RFC7525] instead." to a new 
Section 2 "Updates/Changes to RFC 4642"?
I'll then drop "Notably" in the pasted wording, and mention that 
detailed changes are listed in Appendix A of the document.
The "Recommendations" Section becomes Section 3, and so on.

Or did you have something else in mind?

Thanks again,

-- 
Julien ÉLIE

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