[Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-bess-evpn-proxy-arp-nd-09

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Reviewer: Russ Housley
Review result: Almost Ready

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Document: draft-ietf-bess-evpn-proxy-arp-nd-09
Reviewer: Russ Housley
Review Date: 2020-12-04
IETF LC End Date: 2020-12-15
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Almost Ready

Major Concerns:

There is a normative downward reference to Informational RFC 6820.
It looks to me like this should be an informative reference.

Minor Concerns:

The Abstract seems very long.  I suggest:

   This document describes the EVPN Proxy-ARP/ND function, augmented
   by the capability of the ARP/ND Extended Community.  Together,
   these help operators of Internet Exchange Points (IXPs), Data
   Centers (DCs), and other networks deal with IPv4 and IPv6 address
   resolution issues associated with large Broadcast Domains (DBs) by
   reducing and even suppressing the flooding produced by address
   resolution in the EVPN network.


When there is a line break in the middle of "->", it is quite difficult
to read.  I hope there is a way to make the hyphen non-breaking.

s2.2: s/devices and therefore floods/devices, and therefore, floods/

s2.2: s/messages, however ARP/messages; however, ARP/

s6.5: s/IXP's peering network space/IXP peering network space/

s7: s/flooded, however the/flooded; however, the/

s7: s/will definitely protect/protects/

IDnits reports:

  == The 'Updates: ' line in the draft header should list only the _numbers_
     of the RFCs which will be updated by this document (if approved); it
     should not include the word 'RFC' in the list.