Re: [Gen-art] [v6ops] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-v6ops-transition-ipv4aas-12

JORDI PALET MARTINEZ <jordi.palet@consulintel.es> Mon, 07 January 2019 11:15 UTC

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Hi Matthew,

Thanks for your review!

We are using a special language, not RFC2119 (used in RFC7084). Anyway, I will make a note to reflect your input.

I will also correct the other nits you mention.

Regards,
Jordi
 
 

-----Mensaje original-----
De: v6ops <v6ops-bounces@ietf.org>; en nombre de Matthew Miller <linuxwolf+ietf@outer-planes.net>;
Fecha: jueves, 3 de enero de 2019, 4:31
Para: <gen-art@ietf.org>;
CC: <v6ops@ietf.org>;, <ietf@ietf.org>;, <draft-ietf-v6ops-transition-ipv4aas.all@ietf.org>;
Asunto: [v6ops] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-v6ops-transition-ipv4aas-12

    Reviewer: Matthew Miller
    Review result: Ready with Nits
    
    I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area
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    Document: draft-ietf-v6ops-transition-ipv4aas-12
    Reviewer: Matthew A. Miller
    Review Date: 2019-01-02
    IETF LC End Date: 2018-12-14
    IESG Telechat date: 2019-01-10
    
    Summary:  This document is ready to be published as Informational,
    but has some nits that should be addressed before publication.
    
    Major issues: N/A
    
    Minor issue:
    
    There are some instances within the main content that RFC 2119
    keywords are present as lower case. If these are intentional, then
    RFC 8174 needs to be applied.
    
    Nits/editorial comments: 
    
    * In section 1. "Introduction" (and its subsections), the term "IPv6
    Transition CE Router" is not preceded with a definite or indefinite
    article, although it is throughout the rest of this document.
    * In section 1. "Introduction", the phrase "prohibitive expense"
    ought to be "prohibitively expensive".
    * In section 7. "Code Considerations", the word "neither" might be
    better as "nor" in the phrase "in terms of RAM memory, neither
    other hardware requirements".
    * In section 7. "Code Considerations", there seems to be a misplaced
    coma; "cost of NAT44 code so, existing hardware supports them with
    minimal impact" reads better as "cost of NAT44 code, so existing
    hardware supports them with minimal impact".
    * In section 11. "Annex A: Usage Scenarios", the comma seems
    unneeded in the phrase "another CE behind it, takes care of that".
    * In section 12. "Annex B: End-User Network Architecture", the
    term "end-user" should be used consistently, it is sometimes
    "end user".
    
    
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