Re: [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-lpwan-schc-over-lorawan-10

Olivier Gimenez <ogimenez@semtech.com> Mon, 05 October 2020 09:53 UTC

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From: Olivier Gimenez <ogimenez@semtech.com>
To: Robert Sparks <rjsparks@nostrum.com>, "gen-art@ietf.org" <gen-art@ietf.org>
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Dear Robert,



Thank you for your review. I answered in your email.



Olivier



> -----Original Message-----

> From: Robert Sparks via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org>

> The abstract says "This is called a profile." It would be better to say

> something like "This document specifies a profile of RFC8724."



I changed the paragraph to the following (commit f6a3ca7<https://github.com/Acklio/schc-over-lorawan/pull/35/commits/f6a3ca7af50f1c468ad7171c4911760434567808>)8>):

This document specifies a profile of [RFC8724] to use SCHC in LoRaWAN networks,

and provides elements such as efficient parameterization and modes of

operation.



> What does "other Internet networks" mean? Please replace the phrase with

> something more descriptive.

Thanks, I rephrased it for: (commit 94823f8<https://github.com/Acklio/schc-over-lorawan/pull/35/commits/94823f864f4e42c6a0ed934bd0e59864cf22e701>)

SCHC provides a generic framework that enables those devices to communicate on

IP networks.



> The word "efficient" in the last sentence of the introduction is puzzling.

> Could it simply be removed?

Ok (commit 94823f8<https://github.com/Acklio/schc-over-lorawan/pull/35/commits/94823f864f4e42c6a0ed934bd0e59864cf22e701>)



> As the shepherd report notes, there are figures that need to be reworked to

> satisfy column constraints.



Fixed in 8ce2196<https://github.com/Acklio/schc-over-lorawan/pull/35/commits/8ce2196a301a0072c791df1363655453b750eee8> (Also fixes informative RFC which are not normative)



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