[Gen-art] Gen-ART Telechat review of draft-ietf-grow-private-ip-sp-cores-05.txt
Suresh Krishnan <suresh.krishnan@ericsson.com> Tue, 17 July 2012 05:19 UTC
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I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html). Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft. Document: draft-ietf-grow-private-ip-sp-cores-05.txt Reviewer: Suresh Krishnan Review Date: 2012/07/16 IESG Telechat date: 2012/07/19 Summary: This document is ready for publication as an Informational RFC but I have some comments. Minor ===== * Section 4: It is not clear how Path MTU discovery is supported by TCP. Did you mean TCP utilizes Path MTU discovery? If so, suggest rewording to OLD: Path MTU Discovery is supported by TCP over IPv4 [RFC1191], TCP over IPv6 [RFC1981] and some tunneling protocols such as GRE and IPSEC. NEW: Path MTU Discovery is utilized by TCP over IPv4 [RFC1191], TCP over IPv6 [RFC1981] and some tunneling protocols such as GRE and IPSEC. Editorial ========= * References BCP38 *is* RFC2827 and BCP84 *is* RFC3704. Not sure why there are duplicate references to these documents (once for the RFC number and once for the BCP number) Thanks Suresh
- [Gen-art] Gen-ART Telechat review of draft-ietf-g… Suresh Krishnan