[Gen-art] Gen-ART Telechat review of draft-ietf-grow-private-ip-sp-cores-05.txt

Suresh Krishnan <suresh.krishnan@ericsson.com> Tue, 17 July 2012 05:19 UTC

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I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART)
reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see
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Document: draft-ietf-grow-private-ip-sp-cores-05.txt
Reviewer: Suresh Krishnan
Review Date: 2012/07/16
IESG Telechat date: 2012/07/19

Summary: This document is ready for publication as an Informational RFC
but I have some comments.

Minor
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* Section 4:

It is not clear how Path MTU discovery is supported by TCP. Did you mean
TCP utilizes Path MTU discovery? If so, suggest rewording to

OLD:

   Path MTU Discovery is
   supported by TCP over IPv4 [RFC1191], TCP over IPv6 [RFC1981] and
   some tunneling protocols such as GRE and IPSEC.

NEW:

   Path MTU Discovery is
   utilized by TCP over IPv4 [RFC1191], TCP over IPv6 [RFC1981] and
   some tunneling protocols such as GRE and IPSEC.


Editorial
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* References

BCP38 *is* RFC2827 and BCP84 *is* RFC3704. Not sure why there are
duplicate references to these documents (once for the RFC number and
once for the BCP number)

Thanks
Suresh