[Gen-art] Review: draft-ietf-nfsv4-scsi-layout-06.txt

"Joel M. Halpern" <jmh@joelhalpern.com> Tue, 05 July 2016 22:26 UTC

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Document: draft-ietf-nfsv4-scsi-layout-06.txt
     Parallel NFS (pNFS) SCSI Layout
Reviewer: Joel M. Halpern
Review Date: 5-July-2016
IETF LC End Date: 12-July-2016
IESG Telechat date: N/A

Summary: This document is ready for publication as a Proposed Standard.

The reviewer notes that he fouund the document quite readable, but 
nonetheless made no effort to review the storage details.

Major issues:

Minor issues:

Nits/editorial comments:
     It seems likely that the cross-reference in section 3.3 paragraph 1 
which points to section 2.1 is actually intended to point to section 3.1