Re: [Gen-art] IETC LC Review of draft-ietf-lmap-framework-12
Tom Taylor <tom.taylor.stds@gmail.com> Tue, 07 April 2015 18:40 UTC
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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] IETC LC Review of draft-ietf-lmap-framework-12
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My previous review comments have been taken care of in the -12 version. The document is good to go from my point of view. Tom Taylor On 09/03/2015 9:15 AM, Tom Taylor wrote: > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on > Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at > > <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments > you may receive. > > Document: draft-ietf-lmap-framework-11 > Reviewer: Tom Taylor > Review Date: 2015/03/05 > IETF LC End Date: 2015/03/09 > IESG Telechat date: 2015/03/12 > > Summary: Beautifully written and very complete. A few editorial nits > that could be safely ignored without affecting the utility of the document. > > Major issues: > > Minor issues: > > Nits/editorial comments: > > Section 3, "Logging Information": s/and which/which/ > > Section 5, bullet 1.: not sure a protocol is trying to achieve a > problem. Achieve a solution to a problem (solve or resolve it) or > achieve an objective, perhaps. > > Section 7, second paragraph: should delete the reference to the charter, > since that is ephemeral information. I would rephrase as follows: > s/similar to the protocol/just as is the protocol/ > >
- Re: [Gen-art] IETC LC Review of draft-ietf-lmap-f… Tom Taylor
- Re: [Gen-art] IETC LC Review of draft-ietf-lmap-f… Jari Arkko
- [Gen-art] IETC LC Review of draft-ietf-lmap-frame… Tom Taylor
- Re: [Gen-art] IETC LC Review of draft-ietf-lmap-f… philip.eardley