Re: [Gen-art] IETC LC Review of draft-ietf-lmap-framework-12

Thank you for the review & edits!

Jari

On 07 Apr 2015, at 21:40, Tom Taylor <tom.taylor.stds@gmail.com> wrote:

> My previous review comments have been taken care of in the -12 version. The document is good to go from my point of view.
> 
> Tom Taylor
> 
> On 09/03/2015 9:15 AM, Tom Taylor wrote:
>> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on
>> Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at
>> 
>> <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>.
>> 
>> Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
>> you may receive.
>> 
>> Document:  draft-ietf-lmap-framework-11
>> Reviewer:  Tom Taylor
>> Review Date: 2015/03/05
>> IETF LC End Date: 2015/03/09
>> IESG Telechat date: 2015/03/12
>> 
>> Summary: Beautifully written and very complete. A few editorial nits
>> that could be safely ignored without affecting the utility of the document.
>> 
>> Major issues:
>> 
>> Minor issues:
>> 
>> Nits/editorial comments:
>> 
>> Section 3, "Logging Information": s/and which/which/
>> 
>> Section 5, bullet 1.: not sure a protocol is trying to achieve a
>> problem. Achieve a solution to a problem (solve or resolve it) or
>> achieve an objective, perhaps.
>> 
>> Section 7, second paragraph: should delete the reference to the charter,
>> since that is ephemeral information. I would rephrase as follows:
>>  s/similar to the protocol/just as is the protocol/
>> 
>> 
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Re: [Gen-art] IETC LC Review of draft-ietf-lmap-framework-12

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