[Gen-art] Gen-ART Review of draft-ietf-forces-interfelfb-04
Russ Housley <housley@vigilsec.com> Wed, 01 June 2016 02:01 UTC
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Document: draft-ietf-forces-interfelfb-04
Reviewer: Russ Housley
Review Date: 2016-05-31
IETF LC End Date: 2016-06-22
IESG Telechat date: unknown
Summary: Almost Ready
Major Concerns:
In Section 5.2, the document says:
o The Ethernet type is used to identify the frame as inter-FE LFB
type. Ethertype 0xFEFE is to be used (XXX: Note to editor, likely
we wont get that value - update when available).
There is a process for getting an ethertype assigned. It is handled by
the IESG. Please see: http://www.ietf.org/iesg/statement/ethertypes.html
Minor Concerns:
In Section 1.2: s/document reiterates the terminology defined/
/document depends on the terminology defined/
In Section 2: s/The current ForCES model/The ForCES model/
Nits:
Many places: s/IPV4/IPv4/
In Section 2: s/architecture calls out for/architecture calls for/
In Section 3.1, why are the paragraphs in bullets? They see to work
just fine as normal paragraphs.
In Section 5.2: s/header illustrated in Figure 6)/
/header (illustrated in Figure 6)
- [Gen-art] Gen-ART Review of draft-ietf-forces-int… Russ Housley
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Review of draft-ietf-forces… Jari Arkko
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Review of draft-ietf-forces… Jamal Hadi Salim