[Gen-art] Genart telechat review of draft-ietf-pce-wson-rwa-ext-11

Elwyn Davies <elwynd@dial.pipex.com> Mon, 28 January 2019 20:13 UTC

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Reviewer: Elwyn Davies
Review result: Ready

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Document: draft-ietf-pce-wson-rwa-ext-117
Reviewer: Elwyn Davies
Review Date: 2019-01-28
IETF LC End Date: 2018-12-27
IESG Telechat date: 2019-02-07

Summary:
Ready.  There are a couple of trivial nits remaining. Otherwise, thanks very
much for addressing my last call comments.

Major issues:
None.

Minor issues:
None.

Nits/editorial comments:
S3: The expansion of 3R needs to be at first occurrence. This is one paragraph
earlier than the added expansion in v11.

S3, next to last para: need to expand FEC.

S4.1, para 5: s/to the allocation/used for the allocation/