[Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-bess-fat-pw-bgp-03.txt

Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr> Wed, 14 February 2018 16:23 UTC

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Subject: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-bess-fat-pw-bgp-03.txt
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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area
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Document: draft-ietf-bess-fat-pw-bgp-03.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 2018/02/07
IETF LC End Date: 20180209
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Ready

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments: 
 - Abstract page 1: please expand PE abbrev

 - PoC page 2 and 4 page 7: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments

 - 1 page 3: please introduce PE abbrev (it is not marked as well known
  in https://www.rfc-editor.org/materials/abbrev.expansion.txt, and
  Abstract and body are independent so an abbrev introduced in the Abstract
  should be introduced again in the body).

 - 1 page 3: ECMP is introduced twice (better than none :-).

 - 1 page 3: This draft -> This document (or specification ot ...).
  The RFC Editor should update this prior to the publication but
  making its job harder is not a good idea. So if you have another
  reason to update the document please fix this...

 -  1.1 page 4: RFC 2119 was updated by RFC 8174

 - 3 page 6: e.g. -> e.g.,

 - 3 page 7: i.e. -> i.e., (at end of line)

Regards

Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr