[Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-bess-fat-pw-bgp-03.txt
Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr> Wed, 14 February 2018 16:23 UTC
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Subject: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-bess-fat-pw-bgp-03.txt
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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments. For more information, please see the FAQ at <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Document: draft-ietf-bess-fat-pw-bgp-03.txt Reviewer: Francis Dupont Review Date: 2018/02/07 IETF LC End Date: 20180209 IESG Telechat date: unknown Summary: Ready Major issues: None Minor issues: None Nits/editorial comments: - Abstract page 1: please expand PE abbrev - PoC page 2 and 4 page 7: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments - 1 page 3: please introduce PE abbrev (it is not marked as well known in https://www.rfc-editor.org/materials/abbrev.expansion.txt, and Abstract and body are independent so an abbrev introduced in the Abstract should be introduced again in the body). - 1 page 3: ECMP is introduced twice (better than none :-). - 1 page 3: This draft -> This document (or specification ot ...). The RFC Editor should update this prior to the publication but making its job harder is not a good idea. So if you have another reason to update the document please fix this... - 1.1 page 4: RFC 2119 was updated by RFC 8174 - 3 page 6: e.g. -> e.g., - 3 page 7: i.e. -> i.e., (at end of line) Regards Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr
- [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-bess-fat-pw-bgp-03… Francis Dupont
- Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-bess-fat-pw-bg… Alissa Cooper
- Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-bess-fat-pw-bg… Keyur Patel