[Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-lpwan-schc-yang-data-model-14

Meral Shirazipour via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org> Wed, 27 July 2022 22:00 UTC

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Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
Review result: Ready with Nits

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Document: draft-ietf-lpwan-schc-yang-data-model-14
Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
Review Date: 2022-07-27
IETF LC End Date: 2022-08-02
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary: This draft is almost ready to be published as Standards Track RFC.

Major issues:

Minor issues:
In Intro section please clarify benefits of this RFC formalizing the
description of the compression rules. :

"The goal of this document is to formalize the description of the rules to
offer" to allow X Y Z ?

Nits/editorial comments:
[Page 3], Section 3, Typo
"options definied"-->"options defined"

[Page 3], Section 3, Typo
"serveur"-->"server"

[Page 6], Section 3.7, Typo
"same enconding."-->"same encoding."

[Page 7], Section 3.10.1, Typo
"unidirectionnal,"--->"unidirectional,"

[Page 10], Section 3.10.5, Typo
"range sould"-->"range should"
"recommandation"-->"recommendation"

[Page 10], Section 3.10.5, Typo
"the the"-->"the"

[Page 10], Section 4, Typo
"idenfied"-->"identified"

[Page 33], Typo x2
"bidirectionnal is forbiden"-->"bidirectional is forbidden"