Re: [Gen-art] Resolution on comments of draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree-10

["Ben Campbell" <[e-mail]>]

Hi,

This (I assume still unsubmitted) version addresses my IESG ballot 
comments.

Thanks!

Ben.

On 11 Dec 2015, at 5:16, Jiangyuanlong wrote:

> Hi all,
>
> Thanks a lot for your reviews.
> Based on all the comments received during the IESG evaluation, we have 
> prepared a tentative version 11 for this draft.
> We believe all the comments are resolved, but please check whether you 
> have any concerns with the texts in this version.
>
> If there are no further comments, we will upload it as the formal 
> revision 11 version.
>
> Best regards,
> Yuanlong
>
>> -----Original Message-----
>> From: BRUNGARD, DEBORAH A [mailto:[e-mail]]
>> Sent: Thursday, December 03, 2015 11:03 PM
>> To: Jari Arkko
>> Cc: Jiangyuanlong; Russ Housley; 
>> [e-mail]; IETF
>> Gen-ART; IETF
>> Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Review of 
>> draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree-10
>>
>> Hi Jari,
>>
>> Yes, we'll be doing a new revision for addressing other comments.
>>
>> I've asked for today's telechat if no discusses to mark it as 
>> approved, revised
>> draft needed.
>>
>> Much thanks Russ for your review!
>>
>> Deborah
>>
>>
>> Sent from my iPhone
>>
>>> On Dec 3, 2015, at 1:08 PM, Jari Arkko <[e-mail]> wrote:
>>>
>>> Many thanks for your detailed review, Russ!
>>>
>>> Yuanlong, will there be a new draft version or other edits before 
>>> the draft
>>> is approved?
>>>
>>> Jari
>>>
>>>> On 17 Nov 2015, at 00:53, Jiangyuanlong <[e-mail]>
>> wrote:
>>>>
>>>> Russ,
>>>>
>>>> Thanks a lot for your review and good observations.
>>>> Please see my comments in line.
>>>>
>>>> Best regards,
>>>> Yuanlong
>>>>
>>>>> -----Original Message-----
>>>>> From: Russ Housley [mailto:[e-mail]]
>>>>> Sent: Saturday, November 14, 2015 1:28 AM
>>>>> To: [e-mail]
>>>>> Cc: IETF Gen-ART; IETF
>>>>> Subject: Gen-ART Review of draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree-10
>>>>>
>>>>> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General 
>>>>> Area Review
>>>>> Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the 
>>>>> IESG for
>>>>> the IETF Chair. Please wait for direction from your document 
>>>>> shepherd or AD
>>>>> before posting a new version of the draft.
>>>>>
>>>>> For more information, please see the FAQ at
>>>>> <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>.
>>>>>
>>>>> Document: draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree-10
>>>>> Reviewer: Russ Housley
>>>>> Review Date: 2015-11-13
>>>>> IETF LC End Date: 2015-11-24
>>>>> IESG Telechat date: unknown
>>>>>
>>>>> Summary:  Almost Ready
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> Major Concerns: None
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> Minor Concerns:
>>>>>
>>>>> Sections 4.1 and 5.3.1 inclues a reference to [802.1Q-2011].  
>>>>> Should this be
>>>>> the 2014 version of the document?  If not, please add the 
>>>>> informative
>>>>> reference for [802.1Q-2011].
>>>> [YJ] Yes, all these should refer to [802.1Q-2014].
>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> Other Editorial Comments:
>>>>>
>>>>> The Abstract should appear on the title page.
>>>> [YJ] OK.
>>>>
>>>>> Section 3 needs a reference for MEF 6.1:
>>>>> s/Specification MEF 6.1/Specification MEF 6.1 [MEF6.1]/ Also, 
>>>>> [MEF6.1]
>>>>> needs to be added as a normative reference.
>>>> [YJ] All these will be updated to MEF 6.2.
>>>>
>>>>> Section 3 needs a reference for IEEE 802.1Q-2003:
>>>>> s/B.1.3 of IEEE 802.1Q-2003/B.1.3 of IEEE 802.1Q-2003 
>>>>> [802.1Q-2003]/ Also,
>>>>> please add an informative reference for [802.1Q-2003].
>>>> [YJ] Yes, we will add an informative reference for [802.1Q-2003].
>>>>
>>>>> Third level section headings do not have space between the section 
>>>>> number
>>>>> and the section title.  For example:
>>>>> s/5.3.1.PW Processing/5.3.1. PW Processing/
>>>> [YJ] OK.
>>>>
>>>>> In Fig 4, there is room to shift the figure to the right, this 
>>>>> will allow the "AC"
>>>>> labels to fit better on the left:
>>>>>
>>>>>          +----------------------------------------+
>>>>>          |           VPLS-capable PE model        |
>>>>>          |   +---------------+          +------+  |
>>>>>          |   |               |==========|TVSI-1|------------
>>>>> +---+  AC  |   |               ------------      |------------ PWs
>>>>> |CE |----------|     Bridge    ------------      |------------
>>>>> +---+      |   |               | Root &   +------+  |
>>>>>          |   |     Module    | Leaf VLAN   o      |
>>>>>          |   |               |             o      |
>>>>>          |   |               |             o      |
>>>>>          |   |               |             o      |
>>>>>          |   |               |             o      |
>>>>> +---+  AC  |   |               |   VLAN-n +------+  |
>>>>> |CE |----------|               ------------VSI-n |-------------
>>>>> +---+      |   |               |==========|      |------------- 
>>>>> PWs
>>>>>          |   |               |     ^    |      |-------------
>>>>>          |   +---------------+     |    +------+  |
>>>>>          |                         |              |
>>>>>          +-------------------------|--------------+
>>>>>                        LAN emulation Interface
>>>>>
>>>>>      Figure 4  A VPLS PE Model for E-Tree with a Single T-VSI
>>>>
>>>>
>>>> [YJ] OK.
>>>>
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