[Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-rmcat-coupled-cc-06
Matthew Miller <linuxwolf+ietf@outer-planes.net> Mon, 11 September 2017 15:43 UTC
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Reviewer: Matthew Miller Review result: Ready with Nits I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments. For more information, please see the FAQ at <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Document: draft-ietf-rmcat-coupled-cc-06 Reviewer: Matthew A. Miller Review Date: 2017-09-11 IETF LC End Date: 2017-08-28 IESG Telechat date: 2017-09-14 Summary: This document is ready to be published as Experimental; I have some nits below that addressing them would help with the readability. Major issues: NONE Minor issues: NONE Nits/editorial comments: * In Section 2. "Definitions", the second sentence detailing the term "Flow" is awkward. I think "or" can be added between "connection," and "an RTP stream" to correct it? """ It could, for example, be a transport layer connection, or an RTP stream [RFC7656], whether or not this RTP stream is multiplexed onto an RTP session with other RTP streams. """ * In Section 4. "Architectural overview", the last paragraph has an awkwardly-phrased sentence. I suggest the following sentence be changed from: """ It does, for instance, not define how many bits must be used to represent FSIs, or in which way the entities communicate. """ to the following: """ It does not, for instance, define how many bits must be used to represent FSIs, or in which way the entities communicate. """
- [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-r… Matthew Miller
- Re: [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ie… Mirja Kuehlewind (IETF)