Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-storm-ipsec-ips-update-03.txt

Francis,

Thank you for the review.  I have made all three changes in my working version that
will become the -04.

Merci,
--David

> -----Original Message-----
> From: gen-art-bounces@ietf.org [mailto:gen-art-bounces@ietf.org] On Behalf Of
> Francis Dupont
> Sent: Thursday, August 15, 2013 4:45 AM
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> Subject: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-storm-ipsec-ips-update-03.txt
> 
> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on
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> Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
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> Document: draft-ietf-storm-ipsec-ips-update-03.txt
> Reviewer: Francis Dupont
> Review Date: 2013-08-14
> IETF LC End Date: 2013-08-19
> IESG Telechat date: unknown
> 
> Summary: Almost ready
> 
> Major issues: None
> 
> Minor issues:
>  - this is in fact a pure editorial concern but as it can have a big impact
>   on not IETF expert readers I put it here:
>   At the end of 3 page 9:
>    use of IPsec v3 is recommended -> use of IPsec v3 is RECOMMENDED
>  Two notes for the discussion:
>   - a RFC 2119 keyword doesn't need to be capitalized
>   - it is the only place with a preference for IPsec v3 over v2.
> 
> Nits/editorial comments:
>  - Authors' Addresses page 16 (twice): US -> USA
> 
> Regards
> 
> Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr
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