[Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-add-svcb-dns-06

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Reviewer: Peter Yee
Review result: Ready with Nits

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Document: draft-ietf-add-svcb-dns-06
Reviewer: Peter Yee
Review Date: 2022-07-08
IETF LC End Date: 2022-07-08
IESG Telechat date: 2022-07-14

Summary: This document specifies how SVCB can be used for named DNS servers,
including ones that use any of DoH, DoT, and DoQ. There are nits that should be
fixed prior to publication. I really have no complaints about this document and
am not repeating any points that have been made in prior reviews. [Ready with
Nits]

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments:

General:

Perhaps change the two occurrences of "a SVCB" to "an SVCB" on the assumption
that "SVCB" is read as ess-vee-cee-bee.

Specific:

Page 5, 1st bullet item, insert "to" between "trusts" and "not". Or place the
"to" after "not".